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March 12, 2013
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He was the perfect soldier, like a white

pawn on an inky board. Innocent fray:

'Unstained', they named the better man

Who swore to find the other side of Day.

He followed every order graven in

Cold stone. He never broke the dusty chains

Of honor, twisting close around his heart;

The iron singing thunder in his veins.

He dreamed about Tomorrow, the other

side of day. Tear-streaked morning never came,

Rain-washed. The only dawn was drowned in blood

And ringed in coiled dragons: rising flame.

The tide of blood that stained horizons, weep-

ing, splattered gently on his brittle face,

He buried, dead, in rushing water deep.

His hands were clean, without a traitor stain.

His men lie around him, dead at whispered last,

The light of life drains out behind their eyes;

(The clanging horrors of his dreams, cracked glass,

Were false. Despair in icy silence reigns.)

The only color left to him is red,

To mock brave, innocent and silent white:

An afterglow of symmetry he once

Believed could end the screaming, endless night.

His shield shatters. Hopeless to the bone,

The footsteps of Death echo in his ears,

In the final stand of a man alone.

A poem written for :iconlightoverpowers58:'s contest: [link] I chose the theme of war, writing a soldier who believed, heart and soul, the propaganda his country fed him - propaganda that ultimately lied to him. He was both a mindless pawn and a hero set on a pedestal. He was a shining example and an unwitting victim.

And, in the end, was it all a dream? His beliefs, his morals, his reality?
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TheAmericanRealist Mar 28, 2013  Student Writer
Ive read the other entries for the contest, and I must admit that thus far, this is the one I like the most. Very talented, very thoughtful, and it has a great metaphor linking back to chess. Best of luck to you amici.
hallosse Mar 28, 2013  Student General Artist
:bow: I'm glad you enjoy my work; I aim to make people think. Thanks very much!
Adonael Mar 23, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I liked the ultimate revelation that things can be thrown into question - how his morals and experiences could be simply vivid manifestations of everything he thought was true.

There was a lot of strong, consistently gorish imagery and I liked the a little bit like an epic.
hallosse Mar 23, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you; I was trying to make it creepy.
Adonael Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It was certainly an eerie piece, but I think I was too focused on the character's experiences to notice it that fully. Still, bravo and you're welcome.
hallosse Mar 31, 2013  Student General Artist
Ok. :)
IntelligentZombie Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Beautiful work! This is stunningly thought provoking- good luck in the contest! :D
hallosse Mar 23, 2013  Student General Artist
Thank you. :heart: I'm very glad it's thought-provoking - that's what I was aiming for. :)
chazcartier Mar 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
stunning. :)
hallosse Mar 23, 2013  Student General Artist
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